English 101 Process-Based Peer Review Sheet
Instructions: Answer the questions below, being as specific as possible. Try to give the type of (helpful) feedback
that you would like to receive for your own draft. One word responses are not acceptable!
1. Is the introductory paragraph interesting? Why or why not? What does the writer give you to make you want to
continue reading?
I do not feel that the introductory paragraph was anything special but it was good. The writer does keep my attention in the last sentence by stating she is going to teach me how to con an instructor.
2. Is there a clear thesis statement? Can you find a sentence (or two) that reveals the writer’s purpose?
The thesis statement is a very clear one in this essay. The writer is clearly explaining how to con an instructor.
3. Type the sentence(s) below that you believe to be the writer’s thesis statement. If the thesis is implied, state it in
your own words below.
The sentence is the last sentence in the first paragraph and it states " It is, instead, how to con an instructor."
4. Do all of the paragraphs contribute to the development of the thesis? Is it clear to you how each of the
paragraphs relate to the process the writer is examining? Are any of the required steps or stages left out? Point out
any paragraph(s) that you have difficulty relating to the thesis statement or process.
I think this was a very well written essay and each paragraph relates to the thesis and in a good process order.
5. Would the essay improve if the paragraphs were arranged differently? Why/why not? Note any paragraph that
seems out of order.
6. Are the paragraphs connected to one another smoothly and logically? Are there transitions between paragraphs
that help you understand how the writer’s ideas are connected? Do individual paragraphs seem well detailed?
What suggestions would you make about adding/subtracting specific details?
The paragraphs for this essay are connected to one another very smoothly and very logically it is again a very well written essay. I don't think I could find much more to add.
7. Are all of the writer’s paragraphs unified and coherent? Indicate which paragraphs have any sentences that seem
irrelevant (“unity” concerns) or out of order (“coherence” concerns).
The writers pargraphs are very unified and easily coherent. The writer is very correct with what they are saying.
8. Go back and read the first and last paragraph. Has the writer fulfilled the obligations he or she established in the
introduction? Does the writer accomplish everything promised in the introduction, or does the essay go off track or
seem to switch focus? Why or why not? How can the conclusion be improved?
I personally love the way the last paragraph is worded it is a very good conclusion and it definitely fulfill all obligations.
9. Now look at sentences. Does the writer have sentences that strike you as effective because they include strong
verbs, specific details, memorable phrases, or striking images? Does the writer have any words they repeat too
often, use incorrectly, or misspells? Finally, does the writer have any tendencies for error they should be made
aware of? (Think comma splices, run-on sentences, switches in verb tense, etc.)
I think this writer uses a lot of details and imaging in there sentences. Each sentence seems to be very well written.
10. Write a summary comment that explains what you like best about the paper. Then, describe the two features of the paper that most need improvement. What suggestion(s) for overcoming these problems do you have?
I thought this was a very good paper and it entailed a lot of insight. I really loved the conclusion, to me those are usually very hard to do and this person executed it very well. I can only really see one thing that could actually be improved on in this paper and that is maybe the introductory paragraph you could add a little more to make me want to keep reading, because once I read it all I was happy I kept going it was very well written after that.
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